Response to Emily

Emily, I like the ideas that you brought up in your paper so far. Like Mona, I also think your thesis needs to be a more concrete so the reader knows what your main focus will be. I think you introduced and explained Sal's character well, and I like how you describe the "road" as a force that keeps drawing them away from the women they meet. I touched on a similar issue in the first part on my paper, and I agree with the point of view you have taken so far. A little more proof-reading and you'll be on your way!