Response to Emily

I know you texted to the group chat that you thought that you wrote poorly but I actually viewed the writing as informative and fluent. Aside from a few grammatical errors, you wrote well, however, your thesis should be a little more defined because I'm not all too sure on what point you are trying to bring across. I liked your use of quotations and direct referencing to the text and other than that, I only think you need to proof read it a little.